Public Health Education โ Band 8 Model Answer
Health ยท IELTS Task 2 ยท Target: Band 8
Task Question
Some people argue that governments should spend more money on public health education campaigns rather than on treating sick people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The proposition reflects a growing consensus in epidemiology: that the most powerful determinants of population health lie upstream of clinical care.Examiner noteImmediately signals familiarity with the academic field โ Band 8 LR and TA. I broadly agree, though the framing as an either/or choice between education and treatment misrepresents the complexity of health system design.
The case for preventive investment is compelling on both humanitarian and economic grounds. Non-communicable diseases โ diabetes, cardiovascular disease, certain cancers โ now account for approximately 74% of global deathsExaminer notePrecise statistic with a dash-enclosed appositive โ demonstrates information density and GRA sophistication., the majority being preventable through behavioural and environmental intervention. Public health campaigns targeting tobacco use, sedentary behaviourExaminer noteMore precise than "lack of exercise" โ Band 8 LR. and dietary habits generate returns many times their cost in reduced hospitalisation and lost productivity.
The counterargument, that treatment must always take precedence, conflates urgency with importance.Examiner notePrecise restatement and critique of the opposing view โ Band 8 analytical writing. Yes, the person in front of a doctor requires immediate care; but allocating resources solely to acute treatment is analogous to mopping water from a flooded floor without turning off the tap. Prevention and treatment operate on different time horizons and are funded through different budget streams โ there is no zero-sum trade-off in practice.
Governments should increase preventive health spending substantially while maintaining treatment standards, prioritising conditions where the evidence base for behavioural intervention is strongestExaminer notePrecise participial phrase โ adds specificity valued in Band 8 essays. . This is not a choice between caring for the ill and protecting the healthy โ it is a decision about how to do both more effectively.
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